I very much agree with Micky’s point that as a twitter fiction, Egan’s “Black Box” makes good use of the update style of tweet and offers different layers of storytelling to readers. Each tweet in Egan’s work, as Micky points out, is meaningful, functioning as independent updates even when removed from the story. And though I agree that comparing to Egan, Cole doesn’t use much of the update style for his storytelling, I think we can still recognize this use of complete, independent tweets which make sense even outside of the story in “A Piece of the Wall”.
Some of the tweets in “A Piece of the Wall” are retweeted more than the others, which suggests that most of the retweeters retweeted not the story, but just particular sentences they wanted to share with others. I don’t know whether there are any comments added to the retweets (I have to admit that I am not very familiar with twitter, because it is banned in China and people use an alternative to it), but one thing is for certain: what appears to the retweeters’ followers would be, let me borrow Micky’s words, just average, everyday tweets outside of the storytelling. Here is one of the most retweeted tweets in Cole’s essay:
“This, too, is my America: people wandering in the desert in fear of their lives.”
Does this sentence conjure up the image of undocumented immigrants? Or, how would people undestand this argument? Here we are on the micro level of the storytelling, where the sentences are meaningful on their own. But it seems to me that those meanings, being irrelevant to the whole essay, can mask or even misrepresent the author’s intention. I am not saying that I am against it; actually I think the individual tweets’ openness to interpretation is an expansion of the storytelling. But I wonder is this ambiguity caused by the disjunction between different parts of the essay what the author wants? As long as each tweet is complete in itself, the whole story will be inevitable disjunctive. If not, why not just leave a sentence incomplete and continue it in the next tweet? The incompleteness in sentences may enhance, in a way, the coherence of the storytelling as a whole.
Both Egan and Cole don’t let that happen, because, I guess, it’s too annoying for readers. But what I found interesting here is how Twitter as a medium shapes the way people write. A new principle is set, that is, writing sentences complete in not only grammar but also meanings within 140 characters, for the sake of aesthetics( or something els). As a matter of fact, in the interview with Buzzfeed, Cole says that since he decided to post the story on Twitter, he had to “tweak some sentences, break some of the longer ones, firm up some of the more fragmentary” (and cram them into 140 characters or less, I guess). And though Cole doesn’t seem to regard his writing as an innovation, and I didn’t find Cole or Egan’s writings very typical “twitter style”( there are no abbreviations, for example), the “each individual tweet must be complete and makes sense” principle plus the 140-character are enough to make twitter fictions very different from other kinds of writings.
I also found Cole’s use of addressed messages as role-playing in “A Piece of the Wall” very fascinating. It took me a while to realize that the Twitter accounts in interaction with Cole are, in fact, characters in the essay. And since to speak through an Twitter account can be regarded as a real act of speaking on one’s onw, it seems to me that the essay is like a play script that plays itself or, to put it in other words, a combination of both the script and the performance. Cole also uses the “A Piece of the Wall” account instead of his own account to tell the story, partly for convenience, which seems to me like the essay is speaking for itself.
