Class, Wed, 4/25

Moments in style

Some sentences I admire

  • According to my favorite source of information – Wikipedia, The McDonald’s of encyclopedias – Drive has already gained a “large cult following.” [Daniel Campos, e2.d1]
  • It takes Woolf pages to get to her point, because she likes to ramble. Or rather, she likes to put on the facade of a rambler. The writer sequences calculated preludes to each of her points, placing a traditional topic sentence anywhere other than at the beginning of her proof. [Lia Cromwell, x9]
  • Rather than forcing a style upon us, Woolf invites us to throw the small fish back in the water to allow for contemplation, to allow our ideas to thrive, as we craft a style of our own. [Rebecca Dickerson, x9]
  • Subordinate, or Hypotactic, vs. Additive and Conversational Writing [Becca Gil, x8]
  • I view him as a cryptomnesia-afflicted, mentally-unbalanced pity case, perhaps less blameworthy of his gutless conformity by reason of insanity. Perhaps. [John Hosey, x3]
  • And it is in these moments when we hate Don, and Don hates himself, and we hate Don for dealing with his self-hatred like this, and then we hate ourselves for loving him at the same time. [Alex Kreger, e2.d1]
  • Frost misinterprets Kellogg’s poem in a way that makes George feel even more lost than before; Rand only sees herself in Jeff’s story and tries to force her ideologies upon her audience; the narrator is left unsatisfied after his meeting with Friedman because he cannot identify with her as a writer any longer because “the problem was how she looked at things” (162). [Anna Lamb, x2]
  • If Ryan sat down and wrote out a full account of his wife’s state of health, would I respect him more for it? Certainly not. It’s the constancy of his updates, which bring us straight to Jill’s bedside, which moves me to tears. [Avery Lennard, e2.d1]
  • My biggest complaint with their book, and its impact on society, is that it’s managed to standardize “good” writing to the point where the majority of nonfiction prose—at least the nonfiction written with professional intent—is at risk of blending together stylistically, with only content to distinguish it. [Kate Lyons, x7]
  • One day Deb will be content, I hope that she chooses to be more Debs then Deborah. . . . As for now I am just stuck betwINeen. [Deb Mayers, e2.d1]
  • Having begun to understand the individual parts of cummings’ poem, we witness their inherent contrast. Clear introspection (composed though it may be of contradicting words, the concept there is something we can basically understand) held against nonsensical observation, interspersed with bursts of dynamic feeling—the three varying segments of the work. [Shannon Potter, e2.d1]
  • The additive style is at heart colloquial—an unplanned splattering of thought, ebbing, slowly waiting, until gravity is switched on and the sentence accelerates like a heron swooping down for its prey—and then—a conclusion, oftentimes sticking out like an asparagus in a candy shop. [Ben Schwab, x8]

Closing thoughts

Please fastwrite a response to the following two questions. You don’t need to sign your name, and I won’t read your responses until after I turn in grades next week.

  • This was a course in “academic writing.” But we approached the subject obliquely, through discussions of plagiarism, remixing, and style. So, as we come to the end of the term, what would you say you’ve learned about academic writing? How did you learn it?
  • Describe a “snapshot” of experience—a particular moment, in class or out of it—that you will use to remember this course.

And, finally, a true moment of zen

Good luck! I’ve enjoyed working with you, and hope to have the chance to do so again!

~jh

 

 

 

Class, Wed, 4/18

Conferences: Mon, 4/23, 1:00-4:00, and Tues, 4/24, 9:30-11:30

This is the last feedback you’ll get from me on your project. Bring an annotated version of the most recent draft of your essay with you, and be ready to talk about the work you’re doing and any questions you might have about it.

Course Evaluations

Essays: Editing Draft 1.1

  • Supratext: Name, date, assignment, page numbers
  • Title: Evocative at start, clear at end
  • References
  • Document design: Fonts, line spacing, ¶ spacing, BLQs

To Do

  1. Mon, 4/23, or Tues, 4/24: Continue work on essay. Be ready for conference.
  2. Wed, 4/25, 9:00 am: Post x12 to your Dropbox folder. Bring 13 copies to class.
  3. Tues, 5/01, 9:00 am: Final draft of essay (e2.d2), with acknowledgements and reflection.

 

 

 

Class, Mon, 4/16

x11: Revising Plans

Workshops

  • 15 minutes per draft
  • Authors: Ask two questions, read two pages, take notes.
  • Readers: Read note to author; respond to questions.

First draft, Wiflred Owen, "Anthem for Dead Youth," with Siegfried Sassoon's revisions

To Do

  1. Tues, 4/17, 1:00 pm: Email me your revision plan
  2. Wed, 4/18, class: Bring print copy of  e2.d1.1
  3. Mon, 4/23, or Tues, 4/24: Conferences. Bring annotated copy of e2.d1.5

Class, Wed, 4/11

e2: Schedule (one last time)

e2: Working drafts: Getting beyond, “It’s clear and you seem like a nice person.” (C+)

Trade pages with the person next you. Read through the page you’ve been given with the aim of describing the other person’s style as a writer. As you do, keep in mind some of the terms we’ve used so far in talking about style:

  • Hypotactic and paratactic
  • Writerly and conversational
  • Strunk and White/Orwell/Fish/Woolf/Weathers

Jot down some notes about your impression of the other person’s style. Chat with them about what you see and hear on the page.

x9: Positioning yourself as a writer in relation to Woolf

  • Rebecca, “Virginia Woolf and the Off Beaten Path”
  • Lia, “A Man and a Woman Walk into a Bar: _________ Fill in the Blank”
  • Shannon, “Crossroads: Looking Forward, Behind, and Around”

As theorists of style, how do the authors describe Woolf’s approach to writing?

As fellow writers, how do the authors position themselves in relation to Woolf? What aspects of her style do they adopt, tweak, or resist?

If terms of gender seem problematic to use in discussing style, what other terms might we use to describe the distinctive qualities of Woolf’s approach?

To Do

  1. Thurs, 4/12, 9:00 am: Post e2.d1 <lastname e2.d1.docx> to group folder on Dropbox.
  2. Mon, 4/16, class: Workshop e2.d1. Post responses (x10) to group folder and bring print copies with you to class.
  3. Tues, 4/17, 1:00 pm: Email x11, revision plan, to me.
  4. Wed, 4/18, class: Working session; discuss x11, revise e2

 

Class, Mon, 4/09

Questions/concerns about e2

Winston Weathers

Some devices of Grammar B

  • Crots (14)
  • Labyrinthine sentences and fragments (16)
  • Lists (20)
  • Double voicing (23)
  • Repetition (28)
  • Linguistic variety (32)
  • Synchronicity (35)
  • Collage/montage (37)

Sandeep Prasanna, “TXT/SPK Diglossia”

  • What is Sandeep’s take on Weathers? What does he add to Grammar B?
  • Exercise: Turn a brief passage from Sandeep’s essay into a crot (or several).

Gertrude Stein, “On Punctuation”

  • Grammar C?

 

To Do

  1. Wed, 4/11, class: Title and one good page of e2; discuss x9
  2. Thurs, 4/12, 9:00 am: Post e2.d1 to group folder on Dropbox
  3. Mon, 4/16, class: Responses to e2.d1 (r10); workshops