Class, Wed, 4/25

Moments in style

Some sentences I admire

  • According to my favorite source of information – Wikipedia, The McDonald’s of encyclopedias – Drive has already gained a “large cult following.” [Daniel Campos, e2.d1]
  • It takes Woolf pages to get to her point, because she likes to ramble. Or rather, she likes to put on the facade of a rambler. The writer sequences calculated preludes to each of her points, placing a traditional topic sentence anywhere other than at the beginning of her proof. [Lia Cromwell, x9]
  • Rather than forcing a style upon us, Woolf invites us to throw the small fish back in the water to allow for contemplation, to allow our ideas to thrive, as we craft a style of our own. [Rebecca Dickerson, x9]
  • Subordinate, or Hypotactic, vs. Additive and Conversational Writing [Becca Gil, x8]
  • I view him as a cryptomnesia-afflicted, mentally-unbalanced pity case, perhaps less blameworthy of his gutless conformity by reason of insanity. Perhaps. [John Hosey, x3]
  • And it is in these moments when we hate Don, and Don hates himself, and we hate Don for dealing with his self-hatred like this, and then we hate ourselves for loving him at the same time. [Alex Kreger, e2.d1]
  • Frost misinterprets Kellogg’s poem in a way that makes George feel even more lost than before; Rand only sees herself in Jeff’s story and tries to force her ideologies upon her audience; the narrator is left unsatisfied after his meeting with Friedman because he cannot identify with her as a writer any longer because “the problem was how she looked at things” (162). [Anna Lamb, x2]
  • If Ryan sat down and wrote out a full account of his wife’s state of health, would I respect him more for it? Certainly not. It’s the constancy of his updates, which bring us straight to Jill’s bedside, which moves me to tears. [Avery Lennard, e2.d1]
  • My biggest complaint with their book, and its impact on society, is that it’s managed to standardize “good” writing to the point where the majority of nonfiction prose—at least the nonfiction written with professional intent—is at risk of blending together stylistically, with only content to distinguish it. [Kate Lyons, x7]
  • One day Deb will be content, I hope that she chooses to be more Debs then Deborah. . . . As for now I am just stuck betwINeen. [Deb Mayers, e2.d1]
  • Having begun to understand the individual parts of cummings’ poem, we witness their inherent contrast. Clear introspection (composed though it may be of contradicting words, the concept there is something we can basically understand) held against nonsensical observation, interspersed with bursts of dynamic feeling—the three varying segments of the work. [Shannon Potter, e2.d1]
  • The additive style is at heart colloquial—an unplanned splattering of thought, ebbing, slowly waiting, until gravity is switched on and the sentence accelerates like a heron swooping down for its prey—and then—a conclusion, oftentimes sticking out like an asparagus in a candy shop. [Ben Schwab, x8]

Closing thoughts

Please fastwrite a response to the following two questions. You don’t need to sign your name, and I won’t read your responses until after I turn in grades next week.

  • This was a course in “academic writing.” But we approached the subject obliquely, through discussions of plagiarism, remixing, and style. So, as we come to the end of the term, what would you say you’ve learned about academic writing? How did you learn it?
  • Describe a “snapshot” of experience—a particular moment, in class or out of it—that you will use to remember this course.

And, finally, a true moment of zen

Good luck! I’ve enjoyed working with you, and hope to have the chance to do so again!

~jh

 

 

 

Class, Wed, 4/18

Conferences: Mon, 4/23, 1:00-4:00, and Tues, 4/24, 9:30-11:30

This is the last feedback you’ll get from me on your project. Bring an annotated version of the most recent draft of your essay with you, and be ready to talk about the work you’re doing and any questions you might have about it.

Course Evaluations

Essays: Editing Draft 1.1

  • Supratext: Name, date, assignment, page numbers
  • Title: Evocative at start, clear at end
  • References
  • Document design: Fonts, line spacing, ¶ spacing, BLQs

To Do

  1. Mon, 4/23, or Tues, 4/24: Continue work on essay. Be ready for conference.
  2. Wed, 4/25, 9:00 am: Post x12 to your Dropbox folder. Bring 13 copies to class.
  3. Tues, 5/01, 9:00 am: Final draft of essay (e2.d2), with acknowledgements and reflection.

 

 

 

x12: A Moment in Style

I’d like to end the semester with a celebration of the work all of you have done. To do so, I’d like you to locate two passages of writing that you admire from the work of your classmates. Pick your two “moments in style” from two different writers, and keep your selections concise (no more than 100 words).

Reproduce each passage and briefly describe what you admire about them. (Be sure to note the author and assignment.) In commenting on these moments in style, you may want to make a connection to some of the writers on writing that we’ve discussed together, or you may want to point to a feature that seems distinctive to this particular author. The goal is to draw attention to something that a writer has achieved in terms of voice or style.

Do your best to fit your two examples on one side of a page. Make 13 copies of that page and bring them with you to class. We’ll read and discuss them. But please also post a copy of your x12 to your Dropbox folder by 9:00 am on Wed, 4/25.

I look forward to seeing the work you bring forward!

Class, Mon, 4/16

x11: Revising Plans

Workshops

  • 15 minutes per draft
  • Authors: Ask two questions, read two pages, take notes.
  • Readers: Read note to author; respond to questions.

First draft, Wiflred Owen, "Anthem for Dead Youth," with Siegfried Sassoon's revisions

To Do

  1. Tues, 4/17, 1:00 pm: Email me your revision plan
  2. Wed, 4/18, class: Bring print copy of  e2.d1.1
  3. Mon, 4/23, or Tues, 4/24: Conferences. Bring annotated copy of e2.d1.5

x11: Revision Plan

The assignment for x11 is the same as x6. After the workshop on Mon, 4/16, I’d like you to formulate a plan of revision. The basic question you need to answer is: What work do you want to do over the next two weeks to turn your current draft into a a piece you will submit for a letter grade?

What’s key here is that you think of the work before you as centering on developing your draft. This is an opportunity, that is, for you not simply to edit your prose, but to add to, change, and refine what you have to say and how you’re saying it.

As before, your revision plan should have three parts:

  1. Summarize the advice you received from your readers. What do they feel is working well? What do they suggest you work more on?
  2. List at least two or three things you plan to do at this point to develop your essay. Be as specific as you can.
  3. Tell me what questions you have for me at this point.

I will reply to your revision plan, not to your draft. So you will want to make this plan as full, precise, and clear as you can.

Please email your plan to me by 1:00 pm, on Tues, 4/17. This will allow us to talk briefly about it in class the next day.

We’ll then meet together in conference on either Mon, 4/23, or Tues, 4/24, to go over the work you’re doing in revision and any questions you might have. Bring an annotated version of your piece as it then stands—showing changes you’ve made and changes you’re considering—with you to that conference. Your e2.d2 will then be due at 9:00 am on Tues, 5/01.

Good luck!